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[Four. Oh, Nine...] reVISION* April 25, 2008

Filed under: Uncategorized — Blair @ 8:32 pm

Walking backwards down I-10 to the [409]
Someone said it smells like money…
I say it reeks of corrosive atoms
clinging to my cashmere.

Divide the drugs equally,
subtract the middle class,
multiply high school sweethearts,
add crashing cars, killing kids-
this graffiti-ridden coffin is essential.

Notice not the catalytic cloud
in the atmosphere;
but behold
bullets raining into a sea
of asthmatic mannequins
drowning effortlessly
in their own handcrafted
wasteland observatory.

 

5 Comments for this post

 
Aunt Sandy Says:

I don’t think this one sounds masculine at all. It’s so you. Great job, GIRL! Keep up the good work!
Love you,
Aunt Sandy

 
brooks Says:

ya th 409 goes hard.. lol. miss ya blair <3 brooks

 
Debbie Says:

Great job Blair. Don’t be discouraged about the male thing. About your poem, I can relate totally. I’m really proud of you. Keep up the good work.

 
Mary Karr Says:

Blair sure got the 409 area code right. Obviously a kid with brains and talent. mary Karr

 
Terry Oubre Says:

Some of us made it out – never to return – God willing.
Excellent poem.

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